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>>14194 You can get the best of both worlds, the parents can be neglectful. Though it would probably work best if the bully already started out being somewhat heavy. >Yours might be the better route To be honest I only really thought of it as a way that the victim would be able to force the bully to be with her, so that she had an easier time making sure the bully was eating.

>>14188 Alternative ending idea. Rather than the victim becoming the new bully. The victim becomes the bullies friend, guide and enabler. Like say the bully is trying to lose weight so the victim packs some health options with the unhealthy food, causing the bully to eat both while complimenting her and feeding her pride. I’m thinking the victim also dosing her food minorly, as in she doses the food to further make the bully fatter and more reckless. Celery marinated in alcohol with some weed peanut butter, causing the obese bully to become a bit more ok to suggestions. Ofer the bully’s parents help in helping their kid, only to further make the bully fatter. (Personally I would go all the way to barely mobile, maybe some diaper or health play stuff)

>>14206 The thought I had originally when suggesting the idea wasn't that the bully would become the bullied. Though to be fair I hadn't even thought of there being an enabler, just a very greedy girl eating until she couldn't intimidate people to giver her their food. I think it makes sense for the victim to be the smart type, who would be able to manipulate the situation into maximising ghe weight the bully gains. Though my personal preference would be for there to not be magic drugs or diaper stuff, but it's the writer's descision at the end of the day.

I would love to see some more middle school oriented stories.

>>14208 Writer here, work has started. No magic or diapers will be involved.

>>14214 How large will you go? Personaly I really like it when characters reach sizes when simple life activities become minorly difficult excessively. Like say sitting down, standing up, finding clothes to fit (imma big person so I understand that frustration), dealing with other uncomfortable things like small spaces inc at or bathrooms. Stuff like that >>14208 I understand the preferences, personally I just like the idea of the gainer becoming so fat that their own body betrays them. And onto what you said “…just a very greedy girl eating until she couldn't intimidate people to giver her their food. I think it makes sense for the victim to be the smart type, who would be able to manipulate the situation into maximising the weight the bully gains.” I definitely agree and love the idea of the victim being smart (and maybe a little pudgy), but later as the bully reaches proportions that even they can’t deny they are getting fat, I like the idea the victim waddles up and offers free food, playing by off either bully’s pride, ego or a minor insult. Example Victim: “Feeling full? guess I’ll just give this away to someone else who needs it and here I thought you could back your claim up.” Bully: give it here, I’ll show you…I’ll eat this and all of the other lunches you bring…and you better have cookies next time! (Internal dialogue: oh god I’m so full, but why is this twerps food so good, I really shouldn’t eat this but…it’s mine…and by extension this twerp is mine)

>>14206 >Alternative ending idea. Rather than the victim becoming the new bully. The victim becomes the bullies friend, guide and enabler You make it sound like they're married. >>14215 >just a very greedy girl eating until she couldn't intimidate people to giver her their food If the victim is good natured enough, she'd probably start hitting the gym before the bully beefs up to the point where people start to take advantage of the situation for revenge, or the bully starts to notice how hard it's getting to force people to give her their food; she can protect the bully and do the scaring herself (obviously pays the victims back while the bully is too focused on her new snacks). With the bully being a complete moron, she eventually forgets about bullying the victim after all the time they've been hanging out together and thinks of them as having always been friends before being pushy about victim joining in on her gorgings and steadily cause the victims defined muscles to slowly disappear underneath a soft layer of thickening fat. >>14213 What kind of feel do you have in mind?

>>14219 >What kind of feel do you have in mind? Nothing special at the moment. Considering there are zero stories in this genre, I think it would best to start with something simple but well done. Just a straightforward story about the challenges and joys of early adolescence, but realistically affected by being super morbidly obese.

>>14214 I appreciate it, thank you again anon. >>14215 >personally I just like the idea of the gainer becoming so fat that their own body betrays them I like the concept as well, though I would say that simply being too big to get up unassisted, having difficulties walking or other mobility related aspects, as well as maybe having their hunger dictate their routine would fall under that catagory. Diaper, scat or watersports are in another catagory to me. >Example I was thinking a little more machiavellian, but honestly it might be better if it's simple things like goading. The possessiveness is also a cute idea. >>14219 >If the victim is good natured enough, she'd probably start hitting the gym before the bully beefs up to the point where people start to take advantage of the situation It just feels a little against the nature of a clever and slightly manipulative little girl.

>>14223 >I like the concept as well, though I would say that simply being too big to get up unassisted, having difficulties walking or other mobility related aspects, as well as maybe having their hunger dictate their routine would fall under that catagory. Seconding this, mobility stuggles would be great. I also like the idea of this leading to the bully developing a meeker personality overtime, as she loses her independence and needs to have adults like her parents around to help her.

>>14222 >Considering there are zero stories in this genre I think the reason why it's very rare is because there's so many roadblocks to the girls fattening up, that playing it straight would be a tough fight made even more difficult with how little there is to do within a middle school and what little someone their age can get into without an adult involved. >>14223 >It just feels a little against the nature of a clever and slightly manipulative little girl. She's still manipulative of her bully, she's just brute forcing everyone else; not like she'd start manipulating all the other girls until there's no one left without a waddle.

>>14230 >so many roadblocks to the girls fattening up Just give her an unusually big appetite with enabler parents. Or give her some kind of trauma if you want to make it spicy. How do you think people get super fat irl? >how little there is to do within a middle school and what little someone their age can get into without an adult involved Middle school is the first time someone is gonna be going to dances, have real gym classes with locker rooms, go to clubs, see multiple teachers in a day, hang out with friends alone, have a crush, etc. There's a reason why there are so many books set in middle school. There's so much potential when you think about how these could be affected by being super morbidly obese.

>>14232 >Middle school is the first time someone is gonna be going to dances, have real gym classes with locker rooms, go to clubs, see multiple teachers in a day, hang out with friends alone, have a crush, etc. There's a reason why there are so many books set in middle school. There's so much potential when you think about how these could be affected by being super morbidly obese. To further increase the story potential, maybe the super rich parents also has their daughter signed up for clubs or other programs, and the gaining starts to affect her even more. Bonus: maybe all the fattening and eating causes the bully to fall from their perch up high and join more…casual clubs like dnd, gaming or reading. How I imagine the experiences to go >Dancing (both in duos and by themselves) Chubby: minor difficulties, some misplaced steps and at most an inconvenient stomach growl Obese: more difficulties, can barely/cant see their feet, wider movement is harder, maybe of their dance partner squeezed a bit too hard or can’t decide where to put their hands. Super obese: can barely dance a rhythm, constantly falls over, ripped clothes from bending a certain way, inconvenient gas expulsions (burping in the face of their dance partner) >Walking to classes Chubby: take a little bit longer, swing by a few vending machines, sneak more snacks from your locker. Arrive on time with a few minutes to spare. Obese: take much longer, break constantly for food or drink, stay in the bathroom for a little bit too long (stuck or just cooling off in the cold bathroom), raid a few vending machines, stop by the cafeteria for more food. Curse themselves out because they are much farther from class. Arrive late, and sweaty. Super obese: need help walking or someone to constantly remind them to get to class. Raid their lockers (yes they have multiple, more snacks to hold), need help to open their locks due to fat fingers, have even more snacks in pockets/folds and backpack. Rarely shows up to class on time or at all, maybe even get stuck in the door. >Gym Chubby: end up being the slower student in cardio, get called rude names during exercises, constantly fall over from shoves or a few other students poke them. During dodgeball, kickball or any sport that requires dodging, get struck out a lot. Obese: extremely slow during cardio exercises, can’t even bend to see their feet, many clothing accidents, puddles of sweat follow where ever they go. Constantly get targeted in sports, do slightly better in games where it’s your job to sit and do nothing (umpire, goalies) Super obese: too fat to even run (gave coach a slip from a doctor allowing her to sit on the side and do nothing), clothes so large that students make fun of her circus clothes, too fat to be shoved but also so fat that she needs lots of help being pulled up if fallen over. A walking tank, if exercised too much many students speak of her either eating even more during class or passing gas’s in the locker room

Little bit of fairy tale shenanigans. I didn't give the character an explicit age, but I imagined around 13. I look forward to reading the school story the other guy is working on. https://rentry.org/kbgp5gco

>>14236 Apart from the end, I could have seen this being a fairy tale. Very well written, it's almost sad there is no art to acompany it with how well described Red is.

>>14230 >not like she'd start manipulating all the other girls until there's no one left without a waddle. Of course, but there is still several other avenues for the victim. She could use blackmail on some, do the school work or favours for others, convince others that making the bully fat and helpless is in their best interest. You know, flex the diplomatic muscles rather than the physical ones. >>14226 >the bully developing a meeker personality overtime, as she loses her independence and needs to have adults like her parents around to help her. I remember there being a really morbidly obese boy in grade school who had a dedicated aid despite seemingly not having any disability besides being fat. Let me tell you though, he was anything but meek after getting that aid. Maybe it would be different when someone gradually loses their independence.

>>14237 Yeah I'm not an artist, sadly. So I can't make it a fairytale book with loving hand drawn illustrations that you crack open by a roaring fireplace.

>>14236 Maybe do another for Jack and the beanstalk, the story is same (roughly) up until Jackie goes up the beanstalk. Rather than being captured by the giant. The giant sees the small thing and feeds her, gifts her some gold and generally is nice. Jackie returns to her mother who immediately takes the gold for her self and admonishes Jackie for taking too long and other stuff (just being mean) Inevitably, Jackie is ordered back up the beanstalk for more food and golden eggs. Though she also spends longer time in the giants company. This keeps happening as Jackie gains weight. Soon climbing up and down the beanstalk is getting very tiring, so Jack must choose toe either to back down or stay up with Giant in this gilded cage (Personally I can’t decide if the Giant is a male or a female)

>>14239 I know a guy. I could ask if he has time to make some fairytale esque art for it.

>>14240 I think Hansel and Gretel would be the more obvious choice. Except they're already spoiled fatasses and eat the witch out of house and home.

>>14242 Why say that, better yet they find a whole village of witches who fatten them up. Like they waddle into the woods and (accidentally walk into a fae portal) find a whole village of witches that treat candy and sweet like simple construction material. No child eating here, they already have farms with animals. They just find the idea that these humans can apparently eat their homes

>>14241 Sure

>>14236 Hot damn! That’s some good shit right there! I hope you make more of something similar

>>14240 Other WG story retellings Sleeping Beauty: have Aurora be younger and the fairies be extremely overprotective. Like they constantly give her treats. The curse is roughly the same but rather than putting Aurora in a deep sleep, she’s put Ina deep sleep walking trance. The fairies and her family keep her fed and happy. Maybe even have malevolecent also help Aurora grow fatter. Snow White: Snow White is malnourished and after escaping she adopted and taken cared for by the dwarves. However Dwarven biology and Human biology is different in many ways, most importantly here is food intake. The dwarves eat a large meal so they work continuously, snow ends up being large quantities of food and swells into a morbidly obese house caregiver (no horny, no dwarves are into her that way, at most they see her like a lost child) Peter Pan: specifically Wendy is fed by tinker bell, and she feeding her special high calorie fruits in hopes that she keels over, but soon Tinker loves feeding Wendy. Especially with her fat body rubbing together against her small body

I don't know if the site's glitching out or if someone deleted the post, but I'll try one more time. https://rentry.org/f4zdbefi

>>14325 Awsome writting dude. Just wish the protagonist gained weight insted of losing it. Still it was an interesting story with good writing.

>>14325 You can really feel the angst, well done. I kind of wish it had been a monkey's paw kind of wish that resulted in her getting fatter.

>>14325 I also really like the way you describe her body

>>14329 Glad you enjoyed it. A bit more mean spirited than what I usually write, so I tried to include some humour. I'm gonna take a break for a while but I'll write something more comedic and fun next time.

>>14325 This is quite good, although I think I speak for everyone when I say we want to see another part from Madeline's POV. Also, where can we find your other stories?

>>14335 I just post here. If you think my stuff is good, by all means share it around. https://rentry.org/4vap6x43 https://rentry.org/kbgp5gco https://rentry.org/a7wqvrq7

>>14336 I promise I'll share it around if you write us a Madeline story >:)

>>14337 That wouldn't be too interesting, because I imagine her life is normal and fulfilled. https://rentry.org/c249ntmv

>>14334 Can't wait to see what you come up with!

Is there any word on how the writer who started on the bully story is doing?

>>7833 What stories have the fattest lolis?

Anthro brat gets an attitude adjustment via weight gain. Feedback appreciated. https://rentry.org/csuzo9r8

>>14480 I'm not much of a fan of anthros, but it's a good well written story as always. I quite like the little setups that you include to set the scene of who the characters are. I do however also think that they could probably be weaved in throughout the story to not have there be as much to read between the weight gain and the start of the story. Especially with the narration style you use. So for example, this story would probably be able to be started around where Margot is being drawn to the plant and then have brief intermissions to inform her personality in the form of flashbacks, reflections done by the character or maybe the narrator painting it for the reader.

>>14481 I get what you're saying. In a fetish story you want to get to the good stuff right away. I do try to balance that, but there needs to be at least some setup.

>>14482 >but there needs to be at least some setup Of course, and it's all still very concise and to the point. I just imagine that it could work well with this scenario especially to be more in medias res. On a completely seperate note. A lot of your loli stories, at least from what I can gather from the descriptions, end up roughly the same size. I know it's a very cliché question for a fetish board to ask, but have you thought of trying to write something bigger?

>>14483 How much bigger?

>>14484 Aproximately to the point where stuff like getting up on your own isn't feasible and mobility is challanged, to the point where it just becomes more desirable to minimere movement. Think Nightshade from your other story, but lolified.

>>14485 Oh you mean physically large. I thought you meant longer stories. Biggest I've done is a male bear that was 700 something, but you don't like anthros or male weight gain I assume.

>>14486 I dont, no. Or I guess I should say I prefer it to not be anthro, it's not like it in any way detracts from what you write really. With respect to the length of the storries, I think it's quite good. The only thing I would see changed length wise would be the length the weight gain segments take up of the story.

>>14484 >>14485 Yeah I do like your writing, but to be honest, fat stories simply aren't complete without any mobility struggles.

>>14490 Hmm, ideas are a fomulatin'. How about a future technological utopian society where obesity is the norm and citizens are pampered every second of every day and never have to do any work themselves. Until something happens, maybe an alien invasion or a worldwide power outage from a solar flair, and suddenly our 900 pound MC is beached on the floor after the artificial gravity in her apartment fails. And her servant bots make futile attempts to help her up.

>>14493 I really like that idea! Those kinds of settings have been on my mind recently, and I think exploring that kind of technological dependency is interesting.

>>14494 Might be fun if we both take a crack at it. Write our own stories and compare notes when they're done.

>>14493 Really fun idea, but a solar flare would probably also destroy the robot assistants. So maybe something more local like an eath quake destroying the power infastructure could also work, if you want to use a natural disaster. The invasion would give some good opertunities for a bit of degredation and alien sex though.

>>14495 Unfortunately, I'm not much of a writer. I am, however, waiting quite eagerly for whatever you come up with.